2004-04-02 [Ceallach]: First of, major kudos on making the sentences flow at all times. Well done. There's one thing though, that would make this read even better: Names! It becomes so impersonal without 'em. All of them are just characters that talk, walk around or die. Give them names, they deserve that much ;)
2004-04-02 [Pianomay44]: Well, that's where the fun part is. The second chapter is 10 years in the future, and eventually you'll connect the people to their past.
2004-04-11 [Pianomay44]: why thank you. *bows*
2004-04-14 [Little Insane Cat]: I really liked to story, but sometimes I got a little lost. and I have to agrea with Ceallach, they need names!!
2004-04-15 [Pianomay44]: read the next chapter, they have names there! ^.^
2004-08-31 [Little Insane Cat]: you have to write more!!!