2006-11-30 [Nadie importante]:
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2006-11-30 [NarcolepticLycan]: pretty good are you going to continue it
2006-11-30 [Ruudje]: First off I want to say I'm going to do my best to give you some decent art for your story cause hey I know more of the story then anyone ;-) and I know how great it is :-D! So I feel honered to contribute to this page and the books ;-)!
2006-11-30 [Nadie importante]: Yes i am [ NarcolepticLycan] if you watch this wiki page you will soon see it develope...:-)
and thank you veyr much [Ruudje] aka boyfriend:P ill be patiently waiting for the drawings(K)
2006-11-30 [Wulf Skjaldr]: Pretty cool, it is rather Mercedes Lackey-esque, which is pretty cool. Therefore, you're story is pretty cool.
2006-12-02 [Nadie importante]: The black unicorn is my idea...as in the colouring, a black horse with golden main tail and sort of like horn and hooves...so please no saying i copied anyone or have anyone copy me, thank you:-) or at least state where u got the idea from.
2006-12-03 [T_Pop]: where do i find this small comment i'm supposed to leave?? J/K sorry about it but i don't have much time now to read it... but i know by reading the begining it's mostlikely better then the one i'm makeing so thats something to be happy about ^_^
2006-12-04 [Nadie importante]: Thanks for dedicating some time on leaving something;-) its more than most do...and I guess I should say..Thank you!
2006-12-04 [kingtheodin]: good...very good as far as i have read, which is all that is availible. i like it. keep up the good work
2006-12-05 [Dark Side of the Moon]: I like this so far! It's very intriguing. There are a few spelling/punct
2006-12-05 [Nadie importante]: you could send me the coded version via message or email and i would copy paste it...you see what i write is like my own baby:P but your help is more than welcomed!!! and thank you so much for your comment [Dark Side of the Moon]
2006-12-09 [Manveri]: Interesting... I like it! But may I ask what a fer is? How do they look? I haven't heard of them before... Hope you keep writing, I would like to read more of this story :)
2006-12-09 [Nadie importante]: Well I cant really give you guys all the information and answers you might have...cause I would have you like my bf, asking more questions and lots of whys:P! so what i can tell you at the moment [Manveri] is that a fer is the combination of what you read above, elve, humans, etc etc... the word itself fer comes from the combination of the word fairy and elf... I think that from reading the small fragment in chapter one you can see, roughly...Leic
2006-12-31 [Artsieladie]: I like how this is going so far. I'd say you've tickled my tastebuds of curiosity. I will be interested to see how your story unfolds.
2007-01-02 [Artsieladie]: Very good. I'll be watching! *grins*
2007-01-18 [Nadie importante]: *Airport music* Dearest readers please teleport yourselves to readers, or if you feel too lazy to click here you will find a shortcut under Onwards to.., Thank you^^ *airport closing music*
*whispers* and hey with your name you can always leave a funny comment^^!!
2007-01-21 [Lothuriel]: I am watching, I am looking foward to getting the chance to read it.
2007-02-03 [Tigers and Trees]: I read some of the beginning. This is personally hard to swallow for me. I dislike high-fantasy of elves and wizards and unicorns and the like. You stuff a lot down your reader's throats in that first sentence. It feels more like a chore than a joy to read it. You should consider better transitions. The first sentence is very important to any story, poem, or really any written piece of literature. It's what draws the reader in.
Stuffing dates and figures down my throat makes me feel like I am taking a history class over reading a story.
Any number between 1-10 needs to be spelled out. Six knights. Seven stones. A pet peeve of mine, but it's how books are printed.
I will move on to the first chapter. If this was a prologue, consider making it a little more entertaining. It feels like a glossary or an addition to the story that they plaster in the back of books.
2007-02-03 [Nadie importante]: Thank you Emily for the comment, in the first place I dont reccommend you read if you dont like the gendre (spelling?:P) however I still appreciate very much your interest and time so thanks!
Second, This is just an Elftown introduction to the book, just so people dont feel they're orbiting^^' and about the numbers yes I got the remark and have to edit this page a lot but Im quite busy, Thanks again for your comment:)!
2007-02-03 [Nadie importante]: Dearest [Tigers and Trees], I have read your comment in chapter one, I must say that even if i appreciate critics (without them it couldnt be a good book) Im sorry but I am not going to accept the way you speak to me, you're not better than me and I'm not better than you but I'm sure you can be a little more polite. [Dark Side of the Moon] had even more to say about my writing than you and I really am fine with that, that is what this wiki is for: for you to like it and for me to learn what you'll like and how you'd like to see it. [Dark Side of the Moon] was very kind to me on pointing out my errors and I dont think nothing would happen if you did the same:).
Like I said chapter 1 - proven worthy IS going through changes.
Re-reading your message, Id like to tell you, that you're not my boss, or the one who's paying for this website or book...dont use terms like "message me when you've fixed this" or "if you can handle it"... I dont like this attitude and I havent asked for favours. If you want to help Ill aprecciate it very much but you help as a "friend" not as a boss. Cant wait to hear your critics about the contents,
But thanks again for your comment.
2007-02-03 [Tigers and Trees]: As I will be detailing to you in a message, my critiquing style is not nice, friendly, or sugar-coated. My intentions are not to come off as rude, but they are to give you a harsh critiquing so you can learn from your mistakes and become the stronger writer for it. My style of critiquing is brutally honest and it's what I expect back from people; I believe I said that if you couldn't handle that, then I wouldn't critique your work, but it is what you were asking for (as it sounded to me). It's nothing personal on any levels (since I don't know you), but it is just how I work.
2007-02-04 [Nadie importante]: I dont care how crude, raw or strong your critics are...but you can just be nicer...more polite:-) and you can still be just as honest.
2007-02-04 [Lothuriel]: I know it is really none of my business but, there is a fine line between "harsh critiquing" and nit-picking. As an accomplished writer myself, I am used to people ripping my works apart. I have read through your story by the way [Nadie importante] and will send you my full opinion via message.
You tell her that "this is personally hard to swallow" and that you "dislike high-fantasy" if this is so then, you are not qualified to edit this story. And as for stuffing "a lot down your reader's throats" that is exactly what most writers do. It helps capture the imagination of the reader. It sets the mood for the reader and gives them an idea of what the world is like. Just read some of Rober Jordan's works, for example and even JRR Tolkien's works.
2007-02-04 [Nadie importante]: Thank you [Lothuriel] for participating, its very nice for me to know there are actually other people participating and following what goes on in here:-)
Il be waiting for your message,and btw as an acomplished writer do you mean you've published things or succesfully finished stories, etc?
2007-02-04 [Lothuriel]: I have had a few articles and poetry published and am in the process of publishing a complete novel.
2007-02-04 [Nadie importante]: Wow that sounds amazing! congratulation
2007-02-04 [Lothuriel]: Wow, thank you! My novel is a fantasy novel about magic and love. It is an ellaborate, high-fantasy beauty and the beast scenerio. Would you like to read part of the rough draft?
2007-02-04 [Nadie importante]: yes I would love to! so when you can and have time send me a pm or a link:)
2007-02-04 [Lothuriel]: I just sent you a link to the forum.
2007-03-05 [SilverFire]: *hauntage*
2007-03-05 [Nadie importante]: *whispers* sowy...I dont know what that means*hides under a rock* and yeah im supposed to be the writer:P
2007-03-20 [Stephen]: Oooh - I like it.
Keep up the writing, I'm waiting to read more. :D
2007-03-20 [Nadie importante]: Dear public....
[Stephen]Thank you very much for leaving your comment! the fact that I didnt contact you to read it makes me even happier! *high ego...dangerou
And now back to the rest of the public, since people arent really understanding what readers is about, I've just decided that if you leave a comment you will be automatically put in the list:)
Thanks everyone for the time you're spending on me.
2007-03-23 [Stephen]: No problem. I think it's great. :) Hopefully more people read it. Sorry for not signing! :(
2007-03-25 [Nadie importante]: its ok! and yes hopefully there will be more readers:P
Oh, Update: hopefully in the next 2 weeks there will be a nicely done wiki on chapter two!
2007-03-25 [Archeress of Mirkwood]: So, I didn't really have the time to stop and read, as I only stopped by for a minute... looks interesting, but, is it a RP or is it a collaborative story?
2007-03-25 [Nadie importante]: It's just a story that I, the writer, show everyone and you get to read it and comment it and make suggestions etc:)
2007-04-28 [Nadie importante]: Unactive wiki:(
Sorry it's my fault.
We need more people, people!
2007-04-29 [Sirengirl]: The story hungers for detail, but it moves, stays to the point, is clever and original and I like it.
2007-04-29 [brutal.]: hmmmm interesting! never heard a story like this! i like unicorns!
2007-05-02 [Bladieboe]: Looks nice over here
2007-05-02 [Bladieboe]: I sure will
2007-05-02 [Nadie importante]: Well, ladies and gentlemen, we have new dividers^^ kind of big though^^' Ill deal with that later, but you must all go to the Ferolum events to know what they are! And all those who want one in their house may have one, the dark green one is in my house. Lets just keep this to family though... No body (that isn't around this wiki) can take this banner with my permission!
A kiss to all of you,
2007-05-03 [Galatea]: I love the new dividers! ^_^
2007-05-04 [Demon Epona]: Ooh, this looks really great!
2007-05-05 [Jitter]: Thanks for the note, I will check it when I have time :)
2007-05-05 [Demon Epona]: Yes please! I'll have a bit more time to read it over the summer, since the Finals are killing my free time right now, but I'd love to read it!
2007-05-06 [Black Raven]: It's sounds great!i'll read it carfully as soon as possible.
and thanks for introduce me your wiki ^^
2007-05-06 [Nadie importante]: Well, Ill gladly inform you [Demon Epona] and good luck with those!
It was deffenetly my pleasure [Black Raven] it's always very nice to have new people interested in the wiki page:)
2007-05-07 [Kuramasgirl]: This sounds really interesting! Always nice to have something new to read :) I can't wait to get started on it as soon as possible! Thanks for leading me here :)
2007-05-07 [Demon Epona]: Heh, thanks!
2007-05-09 [Maria Elena]: It sounds great!!
2007-05-19 [Nadie importante]: Hey everyone, chapter two is on the way!!
2007-05-30 [Nadie importante]: and ten days later, it is finally here!
hope to hear from everyone soon!
2007-05-31 [Demon Epona]: Yaaaaaaaaaaaaa
u.u; But I'll have to read it on Friday. I don't even have a lot of time to sit down this week. ;_;
2007-06-01 [Nadie importante]: Well take your time, no rush:)
It;'s just nice to have you guys here supporting me^^
2007-06-01 [Kuramasgirl]: Happy to support ^__^ I finally got around to reading both chapters! They sound really great so far, and I'm truly interested in this story :3 You're a wonderful writer!
2007-06-04 [Dark Side of the Moon]: *feels bad* I haven't had a chance to read chapter 2 yet. But I will, promise! 8D
2007-06-05 [Nadie importante]: aaaw thanks!! btw, love the face:P 8D<<< funny:P
2007-06-30 [Nadie importante]: Hmmm...This place is like the desert..no wait there is SOME life in a desert8-) *sighs*
2007-09-12 [Ruudje]: Indeed, where are you people?? wake up!!
2007-09-15 [Demon Epona]: I'm at school for 11 hours a day.
Sorry. ^^ I really like the story so far though!
2007-09-16 [Nadie importante]: i think that should be called child abuse:P:O! and thanks:-)
2007-09-21 [Nadie importante]: EVERYONE!! I COMMAND YOU TO GO TO FEROLUM EVENTS AND BEHOLD THE PIECE!!!! *does Jedi hand move*..fers dont have that tradexD